Nahuáles are elderly sorcerers with the ability to shapeshift into any kind of animal at will.
Ditch "kind of"
are bigger in size and also present way more hostile behaviour.
Ditch "way"
They have thick, darkish skin, and how much fur they have varies from creature to creature, often depending on environmental characteristics.
Break this into two sentences. Might want to change the wording at the end too.
They have thick, darkish skin. How much fur they have varies from creature to creature, often depending on environmental characteristics.
Maybe "depends on their environment," instead?
Nahuáles slowly loose their human attributes as they age, until they reach a complete transformation into jaguar-like beasts.
Lose*
They are nocturnal creatures, and while they are not very aggressive, they are extremely territorial, and will try to harm any living being that they deem strange to their ecosystem, including Warders.
Run-on sentence, try breaking it up.
They are nocturnal creatures. While not very aggressive, they are very territorial. They will try to harm any living being they deem strange to their ecosystem.
Also might want to change strange to foreign, sounds more official.
they will mummify after a day and no organisms usually accompanying decomposition (such as maggots) will appear.
I'm not really sure what your intent is here. I think you want to say something along the lines of like "their corpse remains inedible, even well into decay. As evidenced by the lack of scavenger feeders present on their corpses." Or something like that. The sentence is clunky.
back to 900 A.C. (approximately),
Did you mean AC as in Anti Christum which is equivalent to BC and BCE, or is this a typo and you meant AD or CE?
hunted all across Mexico by the Saint Inquisition
You can probably get rid of "all," and did you mean Spanish Inquisition?
The Nahuál can be easilly killed while on this state with a few well-placed shots.
Easily*
while in this state*
themselves from their a number of their organs when they shape shift
from a number of their organs*
shape shift is two words
$10 000 each.
Missing comma, 10,000
The sentences are clunky and the article is riddled with spelling mistakes. For now this is a -1 from me. However, I don't think there is an issue with the content of the article. So when the spelling and grammar errors are fixed I will change my vote.
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Coolio, thanks for picking up on those little flaws
I critiqued this article long ago in the Discord, and that critique still applies here, meaning I have no qualms other than the grammar fixes from the user above me.
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Hi Eon, still fantastic article from when I read it. Got a real mall ninja boner from reading the equipment list.
It seems you were able to catch most of the errors listed above.
Some spelling instances, I'm sure you can search for these in the log.
"Travelled" is spelled with one L, "traveled."
"Quarrys" (plural) is spelled "quarries."
Tecolote-4 got to tracking, and like a dependable bloodhound, after 30 minutes, we spotted an opening in a cave, and by the beautiful guest decoration and unpleasant smell, we knew we had found the lair.
Consider breaking this sentence up in the logs. Perhaps between "and by." "By the beautiful guest decoration…" could be its own sentence.
Otherwise, besides these errors I've caught, it seems the article flows rather well.
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