Occulens Rays

Summary:

Unexplained beams of light that act like lasers in the forest.

Occulens Rays

SonKingKong 15 Feb 2019 22:33

Another weird aberration, the Occulens Rays. Just an unnatural phenomenon that I think would look cool on the site. Give me your thoughts!

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Last edited on 16 Feb 2019 01:29 by SonKingKong Show more

Re: Occulens Rays

War Time Buckley 16 Feb 2019 06:38

Just wanted to say that this was a good read but I do have one minor issue with this Aberration.

I feel as if it shouldn't be a threat level black. Only on the grounds that with it just being light and only happening in just remote areas with dense foliage, with it only lasting a few seconds and only 100 cases generally per year it should be a threat level red at best due to low casualties.

other than that everything seems to be good. It flows well and I could tell it has a lot of heart behind it.

Re: Occulens Rays

SonKingKong 16 Feb 2019 08:16

Definitely a fair point. Any suggestions on upping its danger value? I assumed disintegration with light lasers was dangerous. Maybe up the chance of occurences?

Re: Occulens Rays

War Time Buckley 19 Feb 2019 05:11

Maybe have the rays moving as if it had sentience; as if its actively searching for victims. Keep the same length of time and most everything else the Aberrant has going for it. But this is just my opinion maybe other critics may view it as a Black Threat Level

Re: Occulens Rays

SonKingKong 19 Feb 2019 06:02

I was also suggested to make them random wandering occurences, as well as set ones to up the mystery and danger factor. I will work on and apply these changes. Thanks Buckley.